JOB OFFER: CONSTRUCTIVE CRITISISM

Submitted by MINI2uMARIO on Sun, 04/27/2008 - 15:17.

I am in the process of creating a short, I mean very short hyper-text fiction. It would be awesome if anyone could go through the fiction and give me their feedback. I wanted to do so much more but there just not enough time in the day to do it all. Let me know how the design layout looks, the colors, the narrative. It doesn't matter let me know what you like even better dislike. I pretty sure I can handle the pain. Thanks alot.

Heres the url:

http://plaza.ufl.edu/mlashley

Copy it exactly.

:-)

Submitted by Melfi on Sun, 04/27/2008 - 16:53.

Well, I actually enjoyed playing through it. I thought the length was perfect - long enough to keep the suspense, but short enough to where I wanted to play through it again to see what the other option would give me.

Very interesting. I'm sorry I don't have much criticism to give, but I just wanted to let you know I played through it and liked it :o)

cool creativity

Submitted by mony greene on Sun, 04/27/2008 - 22:15.

I also liked interacting with the game. The suspense that came with not knowing what my decision on what route the story would be carried out brought an added excitement to the story. Some set backs might have been small grammatical errors like verb, subject agreement (unless purposely put in to accent the characters, et cetera) and typographical errors like spelling Romero instead of Romeo, (?).

have you ever seen the movie

Submitted by Sylvia on Tue, 04/29/2008 - 16:10.

have you ever seen the movie sliding doors? i'm going to venture a guess and assume you have. it was way too reminiscent of the movie for my taste, even the names were the same.